x-evelynn-x

---don't leave me like this... again---

CONTENT: Your diary seems to have changed a lot in it's lifetime. At first, it just seemed to be an "addicting" way to recap your day and just write down what's up. Later, the inconsistent and random thoughts seem to have some organization, if that makes sense. The entries talk about a girl, maybe the writer, maybe another girl. A lot of hate and anger. Great release. "Everyone's a critic. Everyone's a hypocrite." Something gets me like a splinter though, I see what you're trying to write and do, and it's a very great idea, I just don't know if you convey it well enough. You talk about a third person girl, then first person, it's one in the same. Some entries it makes me think a lot (and even make me want to debate you [i.e. Good Charlotte is not punk, but that's neither here nor there] as in your current entries), and some just make me scratch my head and think "wtf?" It's OK.

When I read an entry (here) and read your current entry, one thing went through my mind: hyporcrite. You're a hypocrite only to later condemn hypocrites. "I'm a part of the Christian Hardcore/Metalcore scene... there is NOTHING fucking Christian about fighting... People are so fucking stupid." Maybe it was a rant, but I don't like reading stuff like this. (25/45)

EXPRESSION: You have plenty of rants and definitely let everyone know what's on your mind. You hold nothing back, and your personality does shine through. (20/25)

EXTRAS: A link to James and Neko, the cat. Nothing spectacular. You do have a picture of Trish and Brett, that may suffice. (5/10)

CONTACT: Just notes? Hmmm. Maybe wanna add an e-mail and guestbook or something. You do have an AIM name in your profile, but that won't get you full credit. (4/10)

LINK: Under reviews. (10/10)

SCORE: 64/100

COMMENTS: Here are some things you can work on for sure: you don't necessarily need to spice up your diary, just maybe add a thing like a "cast" page and maybe a few more ways of being able to get a hold of you. A guestbook and an e-mail address would get you the full 10 points for contact. Organize a little better, put your surveys and stuff on your main page. Finally, of course, don't be afraid to let out everything, just make sure you think things through before you rant and publish something, or you may be removing foot from mouth later.

Score: 64

Reviewed on 2003-09-04 at 11:42 a.m. by Stebo