lucid-denial

...the Chemistry notebook is not worthy of Elijah...

CONTENT: I can't lie, your content kind-of bored me. You have a 100% daylog type diary, and daylogs aren't so bad if they include more then just "I did this, and then this, and saw this person who said this..." you need to include more emotion, more about how you felt about what is happening in your life. You wrote a lot about your trip to LA, although you never really said why you were going, I just noticed you went to some classes at what you call "skool". Netspeak doesn't flatter you, your grammar and spelling are pretty good if you just avoid "skool". Your diary is for you, you seem to write only for you and your friends. You had a lot to say about cars, which was interesting, but refering back to this, seeing two Mustangs drive by each other isn't so spectacular, and you just came off kind of airy. Being that my dad owns a Mustang, whenever we see another Mustang, two drive by each other...see how that's kind of not-so-cool? I know you're an intelligent girl, you just don't always come off that way, you have to think deeper, express your emotions more. (25/45)

EXPRESSION: Although I didn't like what you wrote so much, you really did manage to have some personal expression. You could have included a lot more using emotions and ideas that make your diary unique, but your personal writing style was very evident, as well as things you are into and things you aren't into. Also, the fact that you have something personal like a picture of Elijah Wood in your layout helps your diary reflect you and something you like. (18/25)

EXTRAS: Imood, rings, profile, lists. (8/10)

CONTACT: Guestbook, email, AIM, notes. (10/10)

LINK: Yes. (10/10)

TOTAL SCORE: (71/100)

COMMENTS: If you change what you write about just the littlest bit, your diary will have improved so much, and be more interesting for strangers to read.

Score: 71/100

Reviewed on 2003-08-05 at 4:11 p.m. by Renee