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sugababie88

sugababie88

this is where i can be myself...

CONTENT: 30/45

I must say that the majority of the content was just a day-log. There's nothing wrong with recording your day. However, throwing in some extra entries with your thoughts on current issues would be interesting. Like your entry about the book you read where you talk about child abuse. Maybe you could discuss things that are going on in your life and age group as an almost 16 year old girl... like teen pregnancy, sex/abstinance, drugs (you HINT at this, but dont go into how you feel about the topic), disease (STDs, cancer, your TB scare, etc), school, college/university, politics - anything! A simple day log can get boring for people who dont know you in real life... especially when the day consists of hanging out with people we dont know.

You have quite a few grammer and spelling mistakes, but hey, who doesn't. I think some of it is a lapse into "chat lingo" and leaving out letters and/or words for ease of typing. You'll grow out of that. =) In the meantime, just slow down a little. Type a little slower, maybe read over what you wrote before you click "done!"

PERSONALITY: 10/25

This entry kind of hinted at a personality... but I thought a TB scare would be a little more upsetting and even though you say you're worried, I thought there should have been a little more elaboration on how you were feeling - scared, upset, nervous, whatever.

You finally show some more emotion in this entry about the book you read. I practically jumped up and down with joy at finally getting some emotions out of you!

There are small tidbits of emotion in other entries - like entries about fighting with your mother... elaborate on that! Really use your diary as an outlet for your feelings. Let it be a place where you can go to release your emotion and not let it bother you anymore. =)

EXTRAS: 5/10

Eh, not a whole lot going on in this department. Some of the things you do have are a little overlapping. The cast page and about you page have some overlap. But there could definitely be more to check out.

CONTACT: 10/10

Email, aim, notes, guestbook - that's good for me!

LINK: 8/10

You have a functioning link back to us on your links page. HOWEVER, I would think it would be on the "reviews" page... as that would make more sense. It took me a few to find it, so i'm taking a couple points off for that.

COMMENTS:

That music that you have linked on every page is highly annoying. I personally hate webpages with music you can't shut off. There are webpage music codes where you can click to play, stop, etc - get one! I like that song, but hearing it over and over can really get to a person.

I would also suggest looking into some diary prompt sites. Like I mentioned above, including your thoughts on particular subjects would make for more interesting reading. Those sites often have really great thought-inspiring prompts that you can elaborate on. Not only would you get to post more entries, but we'd get to know more about your views and how you see the world you live in.

Score: 63/100

Reviewed on 2003-09-10 at 10:20 p.m. by Midge

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